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Client work Don't mind critiques, but I'm not actively looking for them
- Turtle Island
- by lundeja
- Not gonna pretend that I'm inventing the wheel by doing a turtle mosaic. I think I put a unique spin on it, though. I found a shape that I wanted to work with, sort of an imperfect triangular stone and I worked it into the shape of a turtle which ended up looking like a star as well.... so bonus I guess.
- Number of views: 4376
- Date Submitted: May. 18 '09
- Added to Gallery: May. 24 '09
- As seen on: Website Design Wisconsin
May. 24 '09
theartistt said:my husband is writing a trilogy called "Turtle Island" (copyright 2008) and I'm totally pissed at you... I'll get over it eventually... (grumbles) good mark...
May. 24 '09
logomotive said:Jared, I think there is so much more potential here? I like it but think I see more opportunities geometrically. Even with the current triangular shapes.
May. 24 '09
lundeja said:LOL, Trish. Sorry :)
Mike, thanks for your input. I'll have to explore it a bit more and hopefully see what you see.
May. 25 '09
typographics said:Seems like the typography needs some attention. The icon is a mosaic of rounded stones, which people would relate to objects found in nature, but then you have a very corporate typeface. They don't seem to mesh well together. Something a little more hand written? It is a spa after all. Maybe just write out the name and scan it in? Perhaps take a typeface and grunge it up slightly. Try different things, but this current typeface doesn't seem appropriate.
May. 25 '09
BK said:Anyone else see an "I" down the center of the turtle's back? The arms could make a "T" as well, but the spacing is needed. My eye is drawn there for some reason. I would try matching that with a serif font...just a suggestion. Nice work though!
May. 25 '09
jennyb said:Elegant, yet cute, all at once. Very nice!
May. 25 '09
hitbyreindeer said:simple, fresh, cute and sleek. Wonderful execution :)
May. 26 '09
grigoriou said:i think its pretty much perfect as is jared. when i look at this i instantly see a cluster of islands from a birds eye view. its great.
and quit it with all this humility. you done good and thats that! :)
May. 26 '09
lundeja said:Thanks for all of the feedback everyone.
Greg, thanks man haha. I'm still working on building the ego.
May. 28 '09
Ocularink said:Nice one, Jared. Wondering if you can go slightly darker with the background color so the type treatment shows up better. Nice job, though, bud.
Jun. 29 '09
moxelcreative said:Nice work. The colors really work well here... nothing else I can say:-)
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May. 19 '09
dimARTirosov said:Great mark you've got here, i like it.
I think you need to take all the center triangulars (i mean everything except the legs and head) and just move them down just i tiny bit, that way it would be centered to all the legs and won't be so close to the head.
Thats it :) oh and i like the colors as well!