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For Fun I am actively looking for critiques
- join 2
- by clairec
- Revision following nido's suggestion: removed the dot of the j and made the other one square. Does it read too much like 'jon' now?
- Number of views: 710
- Date Submitted: May. 17 '09
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May. 17 '09
Houston-we said:Yup, this one works better. What if you shortened the bottom of the 'j' a bit? So it would match the height of the i dot? Just an idea.
May. 17 '09
clairec said:Cool, thanks :)
Houston-we: I had messed around with the bottom of the 'j' (extended it to the left, etc) but will give shortening it a go, thanks for the suggestion
May. 17 '09
epsilon said:I dunno .. the concept feels forced to me. It is on the obvious side and the execution is just overly simple to be remarkable. It needs something more .. perhaps gluing i and n together instead of superimposing or not superimposing completely or separating the right stroke of n from the i with a little gap .. something to make it more interesting visually.
May. 18 '09
clairec said:Thanks for the feedback epsilon. Yea it's a simple idea started off as a little experimentation inspired by 'Watching Words Move' by Brownjohn, Chermayeff & Geismar in the 60s which has stuff like the word 'divide' separated into 2, 'addd' with an extra 'd', etc.
I like the suggestions to develop it - will mess around some more and see how it can be improved
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May. 17 '09
l-emental designs said:I read join immediately, I like this version best.