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fireflies
by mainichi
Personal (design) project.
Number of views: 579
Dated Submitted: Mar. 20 '08

Mar. 20 '08

KGB said:

I would lose the dots on the i letters. Maybe also try moving the flies away from the type. When you are further away the get lost in the type and it makes it difficult to read. Very nice start.

Mar. 20 '08

mainichi said:

i will try :) thanks.
about the dots down the type, i was just thinking to get it up little.

Mar. 20 '08

OcularInk said:

KGB makes some good points. In addition, have you tried having the dots all in green tones to convey the firefly aspect more?

Mar. 20 '08

mainichi said:

sure. but i want to show a recall to the rainbow too.
other tests in the next days.

thanks again

Mar. 20 '08

keb said:

OOoohh. Nice concept. You may get away with less dots. Think less is more.

Mar. 20 '08

Loyalekoinu said:

Perhaps you could make the dots closer to the letters blurred out and a little transparent. This would not interrupt the eye from the type, as well as accenting the depth of field you often see when out looking at fireflies.

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