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I am actively looking for critiques
- Lawnmowing By Ralph
- by cobaltcow
- Unfortunately you lose his fun little 'old Mario' looking face at small sizes, but you get the gist. this is actually how I'm going to propose the business cards to look.
- Number of views: 2644
- Dated Submitted: Sep. 28 '07
- Added to Gallery: Sep. 30 '07
Sep. 28 '07
firebrand said:Nice. I'm wondering if works without the rule?
Sep. 28 '07
admarcbart said:This would work perfectly without the rule in the name. You still retain the letters shape and will sell the concepts idea more.
Sep. 28 '07
sandhya said:I would have put that suggestion down as well. But when I am imagined it without the line, it seemed to look like the guy is hanging in mid air with no base to support him as all the letters are open.
but it will be interesting to see it without.
Sep. 28 '07
cobaltcow said:sandhya - yep i noticed that after I upload it. it actually centered to the text, but not with the line extention.
everyone else- the line was added late for the reson stated.. it seemed like he was floating in mid-air. there is also a gap between the base of the mower and the base of the wheels, so it looks weird separated that bit extra.
i'll add up my other concepts
Sep. 28 '07
firebrand said:hmmm, I see what you mean.
Sep. 29 '07
itsgareth said:I really like this, the concept is superb. I love the way that the left wheel of the mower fuses nicely onto the apex of the "M", leaving it in tact so to make the rest of the word appear in lower-case.
Finished IMO.
Sep. 29 '07
sandhya said:This is one of your best pieces. I like this one better, just because the name of the company is directly related to the graphic - there is a visual pun intended which is quite clever. Keep it up!
Sep. 30 '07
Sordoff said:Aha, this is a very, very, very nice visual wordplay! I love it.
Maybe one tiny little pick; How about giving the man a slender, rather taller, somewhat more dynamic silhouet. It would be better commercially and it would stand out more. But anyway, good job and good luck to you.
Sep. 30 '07
chairman of the bored said:I agree, the character looks a little cartoonish now.
Sep. 30 '07
brandsimplicity said:I tend to agree with Sordoff as a slender character would give off a more professional image.Other than that this is a very clever design!
Sep. 30 '07
cobaltcow said:thanks for the comments (and the front page)!
the chubby guy is actually based on Ralph himself (he kinda reminds me of Mario).
Initially i started with a more hand drawn concept (inspired by this logo [url]http://logopond.com/gallery/detail/17161[/url]) but I managed to get ralph looking friendly so I thought it would have a more 'personal' feel..?
Oct. 01 '07
onesummer said:maybe add some grass shavings behind the guy, though not sure if it'll work at smaller sizes.
this one makes me think he's mowing the painted lettering on a football (american) field. Maybe if you got rid of the rule/line and added a grass like texture in the background? I don't know. the line isn't that bad as I understand why you left it. just some so-so suggestions.
Oct. 02 '07
amyblandford said:I just said your other one is cute, but seeing this one- I like this so much better!
I like the shape of the guy. He looks almost childlike, which I guess I thought was intentional to go with using just the first name "Ralph". That's one of the things that's so appealing about this logo, it's NOT overly commercial or serious, I think it definitely gives it the friendly & personal feel you wanted.
...and as a member of the Calorically Challenged I have to object to the notion that slender equals more professional! :-)
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Sep. 28 '07
sandhya said:Really nice work! Shouldn't the second line be centered though?