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The Rollers
by GraphicOutlaw
This is a repost made changes from your feedback, thank you. Logo for local bowling team. Design will be used for a black t-shirt. Look for some feedback
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Dated Submitted: Jun. 25 '07

Jun. 25 '07

sdijock said:

The logo looks good but...I'd like to see at least one of the pins fly out more than the others to add interest - the far-right pin would be my pick. I also don't think you need the gray lips(?) around the mouth. Instead, I would just make the inside of the mouth a gray tone instead of black. And the eyes look more cross-eyed than mean. Finally, consider making the alley floor look more like wood by using a beige color - I think it would help convey "bowling alley" more.

Jun. 25 '07

Craven91 said:

I have two suggestions:

Choose a different font and treatment here. It doesn't work with the graphic.

Turn the mouth around on the bowling ball. The ball seems to be powering forward and the mouth appears to be going the other way.

The rest of it works well for the application you described.

Jun. 26 '07

graphicoutlaw said:

thanks for the feedback, I am trying to make the changes now, What font would you recommend?

Jun. 26 '07

Craven91 said:

Something not as fancy - because the graphic is so strong.

Jun. 27 '07

graphicoutlaw said:

Made some of the changes you guys suggested, the client want to keep the font style. thanks again!

Jun. 27 '07

Craven91 said:

I think you are almost there.

My last tweak would be to make the bursts more random (not all the same size). The size seems to mimic the pins.

Remember the ball is not hitting each pins at the same angle.

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